Hello,
below is an excerpt from the syllabus that explains how revisions work. As you will note, no revisions can be submitted after the 13th week.
When submitting a revision, please highlight changes on the revised essay and attach the graded essay with my comments to the back of the revision.
I am making every effort to return essay one, sections 3 and 8, as SOON as possible. It is often difficult for me to focus for long periods of time in order to grade, but I am slowly working my way through the piles. I really appreciate your patience. Believe me, I would much rather be working my way through the piles than writing my husband's obituary for the newspaper.
ABOUT REVISIONS: you have the option to revise out of class essays 1 and 2. However, in order to take advantage of this revision opportunity, you must submit a rough draft by the rough draft due date on the syllabus. In other words, rough drafts ARE optional, but not if you wish to have the option to revise. (Definition of a Rough Draft: a completed draft of your essay. It must clearly have a beginning, middle and end. Of course, it will be rough, with possible editing errors and development issues, but it must clearly demonstrate that you have conducted most if not all of your research). Once you receive your graded essay back, there is no due date for the revision. However, all revisions must be submitted by the 13th week. (see syllabus) No exceptions. AFTER YOU SUBMIT THE FIRST REVISION AND RECEIVE IT BACK, YOU MAY CONTINUE REVISING UNTIL YOU ARE SATISFIED WITH YOUR SCORE. Please note: you will not have time to revise out of class essay 3. However, you MAY submit a rough draft if you wish.
Wednesday, October 15, 2014
Tuesday, October 14, 2014
Saturday, October 11, 2014
second post for Saturday, October 11th...
I forgot to give you information about the in class essay on Monday.
It will cover episodes one through four of Breaking Bad and you may, of course, refer to your Viewer's Journal during class.
The topic will be life priorities.
As we go through life, our own list of priorities obviously changes...based on age, goals, desires, needs.
Sometimes the list becomes longer, sometimes it becomes shorter.
Think about the five main characters in the series: Walter, Skyler, Hank, Marie and Jesse.
Considering what you have observed in the first four episodes, what do you think would be on their priority list right now?
For the prompt, you will select ONE of these characters and make an assertion about what three or four items would be top on their priority list in life. Be prepared, then, to explain and support your assertion.
It will cover episodes one through four of Breaking Bad and you may, of course, refer to your Viewer's Journal during class.
The topic will be life priorities.
As we go through life, our own list of priorities obviously changes...based on age, goals, desires, needs.
Sometimes the list becomes longer, sometimes it becomes shorter.
Think about the five main characters in the series: Walter, Skyler, Hank, Marie and Jesse.
Considering what you have observed in the first four episodes, what do you think would be on their priority list right now?
For the prompt, you will select ONE of these characters and make an assertion about what three or four items would be top on their priority list in life. Be prepared, then, to explain and support your assertion.
Saturday, October 11, 2014--9:30 am
Hello,
There has been more changes to the syllabus, yet again.
At this moment, I am planning to be in class on Monday. I may take Wednesday off, but I will let you know later.
Below are the weeks that have changes. I have also made the changes on the syllabus posted on the blog on the first day.
And, thank you to all of you who have sent messages. There are no words.
Week Seven October 13-17
In class essay #1—please remember to bring a green (or blue) book to class today (Monday) (You may use either size green or blue book—it makes no difference to me.)
In depth review of grammar & sentence structure #1 (Wednesday)
Watch 5th episode of Breaking Bad (Friday)
Week Eight October 20-24
Out of class essay #2 assigned today (Monday)
Out of class essay #2 assigned today (Monday)
How does rhetoric impact your academic, career and personal life? (Mon.)
In class Writing Response #4 (Wednesday)
Read Packet #6 (Wednesday)
Read Part 4 on Style in Rules of Thumb—pgs. 169-187 (Fri.)
Week Nine October 27-31
Rough draft, optional, for out of class essay 2 due today, via email, no later than midnight (Monday)
How to Read Critically--lecture (Wednesday & Friday)
Week Ten November 3-7
Group Work #1 (Monday)
Group Work #1 (Monday)
Read Packet #7 (Wednesday)
Discuss Procedures and Details for Taking the WPJ exam (Wednesday)
In class essay #2—practice WPJ (Friday) remember to bring blue or green book today.
Thursday, October 9, 2014
Thursday, October 9th, 2014--10 am
Hello,
I have sent an email to all of you, but in case you do not receive the message, I am canceling class for tomorrow, Friday, October 10th.
I have sent an email to all of you, but in case you do not receive the message, I am canceling class for tomorrow, Friday, October 10th.
Sunday, October 5, 2014
Sunday, October 5th, 2014--7:30 pm
Hello,
below you will find the assignment for Reading Packet #5, due to be completed by Wednesday, this week, October 8th.
As was with our focus on health care, this topic, the war on drugs, also is gleaned from the Breaking Bad series, season 1.
below you will find the assignment for Reading Packet #5, due to be completed by Wednesday, this week, October 8th.
As was with our focus on health care, this topic, the war on drugs, also is gleaned from the Breaking Bad series, season 1.
Packet #5 Assignment --three items!
***"Tackling America's Drug Addiction"
http://www.npr.org/templates/story/story.php?storyId=127937271
(this is actually an audio--a 4 minute and 50 second interview that was recorded on National Public Radio in June of 2010.)
***"Confessions of a Mom (and a Former Teen Pothead)"
http://www.npr.org/blogs/tellmemore/2010/10/19/130677774/confessions-from-a-mom-and-former-teen-pot-head
***"How the Drug War Hurts Everybody"
http://www.salon.com/2012/04/12/how_the_drug_war_hurts_everyone/
***"Tackling America's Drug Addiction"
http://www.npr.org/templates/story/story.php?storyId=127937271
(this is actually an audio--a 4 minute and 50 second interview that was recorded on National Public Radio in June of 2010.)
***"Confessions of a Mom (and a Former Teen Pothead)"
http://www.npr.org/blogs/tellmemore/2010/10/19/130677774/confessions-from-a-mom-and-former-teen-pot-head
***"How the Drug War Hurts Everybody"
http://www.salon.com/2012/04/12/how_the_drug_war_hurts_everyone/
Thursday, October 2, 2014
THURSDAY, OCTOBER 2, 2014--1:50 am
Hello,
I am still so overwhelmed with all that is going on in my life.
And the fact that I am so very behind in reading through rough drafts is really not helping my sanity.
After a lot of thought late into the evening, I have decided that the only way to handle the situation with the unread rough drafts, and still keep the momentum of the semester, is to not read the rough drafts still waiting to be read.
If you have not received back your rough draft with my comments, please continue to work on the essay and prepare a final draft for Monday. Re-visit the prompt and the six bulleted points.
Even if you did not receive my feedback, you will STILL be able to revise if you submitted a rough draft.
Below I have posted the evaluation sheet I fill out for every final draft of an out of class essay. It should give you a fairly precise idea of the elements I focus on.
Again, I apologize for such a strange week. My two sons fly into Sacramento on Friday and I know it will be a difficult and emotional weekend. I really needed to let go of the stress of reviewing the rough drafts. I hope this seems fair.
See you Monday. Have a good and safe weekend.
I am still so overwhelmed with all that is going on in my life.
And the fact that I am so very behind in reading through rough drafts is really not helping my sanity.
After a lot of thought late into the evening, I have decided that the only way to handle the situation with the unread rough drafts, and still keep the momentum of the semester, is to not read the rough drafts still waiting to be read.
If you have not received back your rough draft with my comments, please continue to work on the essay and prepare a final draft for Monday. Re-visit the prompt and the six bulleted points.
Even if you did not receive my feedback, you will STILL be able to revise if you submitted a rough draft.
Below I have posted the evaluation sheet I fill out for every final draft of an out of class essay. It should give you a fairly precise idea of the elements I focus on.
Again, I apologize for such a strange week. My two sons fly into Sacramento on Friday and I know it will be a difficult and emotional weekend. I really needed to let go of the stress of reviewing the rough drafts. I hope this seems fair.
See you Monday. Have a good and safe weekend.
NAME______________________________________________ENG.20---FALL
SEMESTER 2014
Out of Class Essay
#1—Evaluation
Grade
Earned:___________________
General Comments:
If
there is a check ( )
next to an item or items listed below, this indicates one or more of those
errors was found in your essay. I WILL ALWAYS NOTE MOST ERRORS, AT LEAST ONCE,
DIRECTLY ON THE ESSAY; HOWEVER, I DO NOT INDICATE EVERY ERROR. You are the
final editor/proofreader of your work. Whether
or not you choose to revise this essay, please take note of the errors so they
are not repeated in your next essay.
_____sentence
level errors (comma splice; run on; fragment; spelling error; punctuation
error; error in capitalization; etc.)
_____paragraph
(s) has more than one main idea
_____problems
with transitions between paragraphs
_____wordiness
_____repetitiveness
_____issues
with tense
_____lack
of sentence variety (in length and/or in beginnings)
_____tone
(too casual for an academic essay)
_____very
general, flat, uninteresting vocabulary
_____lack
of supportive details/evidence
_____does
not address the prompt accurately and/or completely
_____use
of you and/or your
_____unacceptable
errors (# of errors found:________)
OTHER ISSUES:
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